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cfury
26-10-06, 01:33
After posting on this site for the past hours and a half, I feel the extreme need to write music. I have had a mental block for the past few weeks and my brain has been clouded so badly. I'm tired of running from fear and sufferring and am willing to take any suggestions for a heavy metal themed song about depression, anxiety, panic attacks, and everything that just makes you go into a breakdown. I will more than likely use any lines you submit and try to post the final result for everybody to listen to.

cfury
26-10-06, 01:43
WHAT I HAVE SO FAR:

(verse)
Check my head for sanity
It's loss blamed on reality
Shake the facts away once again
Try to pause and numb the pain

(I'm going to try to have this part of the chorus)
I've been deprived of my hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears

creatrix
26-10-06, 15:41
Check my head for sanity
It's loss blamed on reality
Shake the facts away once again
Try to pause and numb the pain

I've been deprived of my hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears
the days, the weeks, the months, the years
i'm tired, but hanging on.

Trying to stay rational
keep my breathing casual
find hope in bottles, god and friends
holding on until it ends.

I've been deprived of my hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears
the days, the weeks, the months, the years
i'm tired, but hanging on.

creatrix
26-10-06, 16:13
oops... i just saw that "heavy metal themed" bit. I think i emo'd up your song! well, good luck anyway.

cfury
26-10-06, 21:14
Thank you for posting!!! I might have to tweak up the lines a little bit, but they are officially in the song. I'm trying to take the "I'm tired but hanging on" and translate it into a metaphor, like "shoot me again I ain't dead yet" which is unfortunately taken by Metallica.

creatrix
27-10-06, 15:14
How about "Still breathing. Try again."

cfury
27-10-06, 21:28
UNTIL THE END (Title needs work)

(Whispering voice:)
Quoth the Raven nevermore
You fought your way down this road before
Quoth the raven nevermore
Will you slip back into the norm

VERSE #1:
Check my head for sanity
It's loss blamed on reality
Shake the facts away once again
Try to pause and numb the pain

CHORUS:
I'm deprived of hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears
The days, the weeks, the months, the years
I'm bleeding, but standing tall

VERSE #2:
Battling to remain partially rational
Fighting to keep my breathing casual
Finding safety in bottles, carts and trends
Climbing the rope until it ends

CHORUS:
I'm deprived of my hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears
The days, the weeks, the months, the years
I'm stranded, but I will not fall

INTERLUDE:
My Demons pushed me down the hill of Hell
I won't retreat until I hear the tolling of my bell
They can touch me again so I can raise my fist
They gave me their best shot, I can take another hit

CHORUS:
I'm deprived of my hope and tears
And fueled with hate to fight the fears
The days, the weeks, the months, the years
I'm wounded, but will not fall